Sitting here at my kitchen table in the green morning light, listening to the endless downpour, drinking French roast with milk, thinking about the persona-poem session I have to lead this morning, smelling the sopping wet grass outside the open window, trying not to think about how long the grass is and how hard it will be to mow if the storm clouds ever do blow out to sea and the sun ever does shine in the Disconsolate North.

What do you think: would that remark look better if it began with a lowercase letter and ended without punctuation?

sitting here at my kitchen table in the green morning light, listening to the endless downpour, drinking French roast with milk, thinking about the persona-poem session I have to lead this morning, smelling the sopping wet grass outside the open window, trying not to think about how long the grass is and how hard it will be to mow if the storm clouds ever do blow out to sea and the sun ever does shine in the Disconsolate North

Perhaps no caps at all?

sitting here at my kitchen table in the green morning light, listening to the endless downpour, drinking french roast with milk, thinking about the persona-poem session i have to lead this morning, smelling the sopping wet grass outside the open window, trying not to think about how long the grass is and how hard it will be to mow if the storm clouds ever do blow out to sea and the sun ever does shine in the disconsolate north

Dickinson-style lines with wacky caps 'n dashes?

Sitting here at my Kitchen table

In the green morning Light, listening to the Endless--

Downpour, drinking French roast with milk, Thinking

About the persona-poem session I have to Lead this Morning--

Smelling the sopping wet grass--outside the Open Window,

Trying not to think about how Long the grass Is

And how hard it will be to mow if the Storm-cloud

Ever do--Blow out to sea and the sun Ever does

Shine in the Disconsolate North--

Modernist brevity?

Table: green morning light: a downpour

A downpour

French roast with milk

Wet grass, open window

Storm clouds

And a Disconsolate North

As you can see, I'm having a hard time deleting "disconsolate," though I expect the Modernists would have none of it.