I have some questions for you: Does this variable meter make sense? Is it an irritant? If it is an irritant, does the annoyance reinforce, in any way, the subject and theme? Or is it just annoying?
The Scots-Irish Invasion
1717
Dawn Potter
Void of Conscience or the Fear of God,
They squat on any Spot of Land.
O, spare us from these sluttish, heathen Clods,
Who murther both their Words and Fellow-man.
4 comments:
The meter works; feels hymn-like. Which, I assume, is what you were going for, considering the topic.
Yes, exactly. But it's a nasty sort of hymn
Well, so is Onward, Christian Soldiers, really...lol
I like it. Especially the old-style "murther" ...feels just right, adds the voice so I can hear it!
"Murther" is also interesting to say--the "th" sound completely changes the tone of a phrase.
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