tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6540771071400993487.post8896498495028241438..comments2024-03-27T07:14:36.800-04:00Comments on <b>Dawn Potter</b>: Dawn Potterhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/07500960150846895633noreply@blogger.comBlogger2125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6540771071400993487.post-25631107297786484352011-11-21T08:13:54.760-05:002011-11-21T08:13:54.760-05:00Thanks, Carlene. I have been sitting with this thi...Thanks, Carlene. I have been sitting with this thing for months, glancing at it now and again but not knowing what to do with it. The point of this history is not to sound like myself: all the poems are different, and most use some kind of formal structure. Many also borrow words or word riffs from primary sources. So each one is a surprise to me.Dawn Potterhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07500960150846895633noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6540771071400993487.post-57486208709707752172011-11-20T11:51:00.166-05:002011-11-20T11:51:00.166-05:00Hm, thanks for the challenge to witness a poem in ...Hm, thanks for the challenge to witness a poem in draft! <br />For me, (little ol' hardly published yah I like poetry and so on me) the poem begins at the line In the ragged evenings... All the narrative before feels like "on-ramp" work; yes, setting up the character, but I am not intrigued or engaged until later on the poem, where the language, rhythm, and diction become more lyrical. And yes, I am a little distracted by the Italian. Maybe less is more? Or use it to create ambience? <br />Am I just blathering? Possibly.Carlenenoreply@blogger.com